Longing, longing for a green forum

[Konstantin]

Сообщение от "sur

No, I Sasha,

What a zhist go lads

There is not a mat or buzy

All sober, not tiddly

Neither the strain nor tears


Well I will let the guys

Or give me a vodka

And the surge as it once

Verse clever double


No vodka?
Then a grenade.

And no grenades?
Trouble!

I'd gone from you guys

Yes, I do not know b. .. Th where!

[artcol]

Why, there's not a forum of art investors, and the salon >

[fabosch]

In this remarkable poetic tournament so far , in my opinion , the first place - the Konstantin ' as well . Just a wonderful verse from the climactic final stanza .
Tob . Sasha this time disappoint - swing right , but apparently, the passions are not allowed to give due attention to improving the form.
Suren, you have a beautiful poem , mnogobeschayuschaya the first stanza , but the second - alas , just smeared all impressed . You would still need to work on technique of versification >

[Toinen]

Сообщение от fabosch

the first place - Konstantin'a

Absolutely!

[Allena]

Сообщение от fabosch

in my opinion, the first place - Konstantin'a.
Just a wonderful verse from the climactic final stanza

fairness and purity of language I note the last line of the discrepancy academic publications > > >

[Art-lover]

Such is the fashion here :
In all observe a measure
        Bury hatchet at the entrance
        Soul pass the guard
       
        Teeth lozhit on the shelf
        Do not growl or bark
        Do not bristle withers
        Do not drink Do not smoke weed

        Do not overstep the curb
Re-read Kafka

Howl at the moon can be
But quietly and carefully
To avoid the madhouse
In the bath day be home

Bana then you will not .
        However, do not forget
About Those Who il late early
From heaven gives fun .


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[Admin]

How many talented people on the forum!
That's where all is revealed - and talents, and soul.

[fabosch]

Dear Art-lover, very glad that you "Command " !
Since I picked up a broom litkriticheskuyu , and you have to pay a portion of " Caesar . "
What are you , a little not finished . Well, not without wincing , to read " ... a measure ... the guard . " That is to say , purely visual rhyme , rather than acoustic . Oh God be with him, " ... the shelf ... mane ... curb " - it is quite imagine you fly on a single breath , carried by " measured tread iron battalions " Two and Two and a half stanzas . And these verses , by the way , you have , perhaps, the apotheosis - failed . Especially good about Kafka screwed up - I liked dyuzhe . But still have to admit that in poetry , even this is quite a is applied, the perfection of form plays the determining role . So I can not move with a well-deserved top podium already located there ...

A young man , after all , comrade . Sasha - what buzu brewed

[Posav]

Сообщение от Art-lover

Such is the fashion here :
In all observe a measure
        Bury hatchet at the entrance
        Soul pass the guard
       
        Teeth lozhit on the shelf
        Do not growl or bark
        Do not bristle withers
        Do not drink Do not smoke weed

        Do not overstep the curb
Re-read Kafka

Howl at the moon can be
But quietly and carefully
To avoid the madhouse
In the bath day be home

Bana then you will not .
        However, do not forget
About Those Who il late early
From heaven gives fun .


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Do not believe it ! (C ) How many times have you banili ? . It is not good fun . >

[K-Maler]

Сообщение от "Art-lover

Not bristle withers

Do not drink Do not smoke weed


Do not overstep the curb

Re-read Kafka

Your poem worthy of completed exchange of courtesies.
But ...
from the list of secular propriety Kafka falls, but the reality becomes clear.

Thank you, wonderful happened!